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Wake up to a Monday that you’ve never met.
You’re two minutes in but not ready yet.
At the end of the day you’ll just want to forget,
Or pretend.

Your showers too long and the bus is too quick.
Wouldn’t stop for you, some state transit prick
No time for breakfast, so you’re gonna feel sick,
Hours on end.

Who knows if your chances will stay the same?
Monday will stay as long as you do
Right now you feel school is more than lame
One day you’ll say you long for sky blue

Catch a late special don’t know if it’s yours.
Get on any way, to steel eyes and square jaws.
Used to Monday with her retractable claws,
You don’t care

The other kids ignore the traffic lights gaze.
You’re not in the mood to dare traffic both ways.
I’m sure they’ve closed the front gate anyways…
It’s not fair

Who knows if your chances will stay the same?
Sunday will stray as long as you do
Right now you feel school is your place of shame
One day you’ll sing a song for sky blue

So they stamp your black book and tick off your name.
Just cramp it back into a bag you can’t tame,
They say that you’ve got no one else to blame,
But yourself

Start counting after the anger has died
Fifty-one steps to schools other side,
When you count the steps you drag you’ve time to bide,
For yourself

Who knows if these stanzas will stay the same?
Friday will pay as long as you do
Right now you feel school is the one to blame
Monday still says you long for sky blue


Everything else on Monday’s a blur
A few teachers and lessons still occur
There’s a million and one places you’d prefer
So would they

The one thing you can say to the afternoon sky
Is that Monday is forever destined to die
While the rest of the week is longing to fly
Every day

Who knows if your dances will sway the same?
Monday weighs a ton like you do
Right now school should be lit to a flame
Monday will pay for what it’s done to you

Who knows if your chances will stay the same?
Monday will stay as long as you do
Right now you feel school is more than lame
One day you’ll say you long for sky blue
did the picture on photoshop muced around a bit
anywho i have been drawing, i've done FFCC fanart and portraits but i'm in need of a scanner
until then i'm gonna write about school or whatever comes to mind
ya know.

this is my firts attempt at writing a SHORT song-like peice and i don't think you guys will like it, alas
i am apathetic
i just think my page is a little bare.

so when you wake up on a monday and evrything goes wrong...
YOU ARE NOT ALONE!
i'm an expert hating them.

dedicated to who mentioned mondays sucked

:note: my uniform consists of a sky blue shirt so thats what the sky blue is about
state transit are the people that run the public transport in sydney
if you are late at my school they sign your diary
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FrozenDruidess Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2006
I agree with Garfield. Mondays suck.

P.S. Good job on a subject I can relate to.
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ashicoolgal Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005
well i dont care what people say
i like this

makes a great song when you sing it
but i got a different meaning from this..

goddam it i'm always wrong
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LinkinLuver13 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2005
Nice job. Sort of drones on, though. I like this part:

"Used to Monday with her retractable claws..."

Nice use of personification. :thumbsup: And I agree, Monday's suck. Hate them soo much. x_x
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ustion Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2005  Student
wow jaz, this poem is really good . Cant not agree with mondays being the shitest day of the week. EVERY thing alays goes wrong on mondays. Its out to get us I tell you.
Nice work Jaz ^_^
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M-Kunoya Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2005
humm... I cannot say this is a superb poem, but it is better then avarage. 6 1/2 out of 10, imo. (hope you arnt upset by that, I just aint gonna be dishonest *-*)
mondays aren't the crappy weekday for me, that would be fridays. bad things happen on fridays XP
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jazblack009 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005   Writer
man i dun come on here enough to reply
its not a superb poem, it's meant to drone like monday's do for alot of people
me included.
I envy the person that enjoys monday's i fuckin hate them
its good i love honesty, a wise woman said seek criticism not compliments
never learnt her name
anywho this was kindof an experiment,
theres a song called captain jack by Billy joel that rhymes like that
i see it passed but didn't go to well in your books
thanks for the comment
i'm not offended
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M-Kunoya Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2005
*whew*
yeah, i didn't think it was bad, i just dont want to say 'it great' if i dont think it is. no, mondays arn't good or anything, i just always have bad things happen on fridays for some reason. -_-
cant wait to see more of your work :D
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